Comments on: one|fifty|five

By: Reglan Side Effects Lawsuit

Reglan Side Effects Lawsuit — Thu, 04 Mar 2010 18:46:06 +0000

I think the addition really works, both clears up everything and adds a little more sting.

By: Nicole

Nicole — Thu, 04 Mar 2010 17:02:01 +0000

You know, as much as I liked the dialog initially, this works really well, too. I really like “Poor Nadia.” Good job, Ramon! You’ve got the touch. :)

By: megaroniandcheese

megaroniandcheese — Thu, 04 Mar 2010 03:39:41 +0000

Is it bad that Spamalot was all I could think of when “alone” popped up? Fantastic story, characters, art, et al.

This is story is what got me writing again. Thank you so much.

By: Ramón

Ramón — Thu, 04 Mar 2010 00:23:29 +0000

i like the way you think ;)

By: Ramón

Ramón — Thu, 04 Mar 2010 00:22:45 +0000

thanks!

By: Ramón

Ramón — Thu, 04 Mar 2010 00:21:51 +0000

i did a slight adjustment for flow purposes.

By: David

David — Wed, 03 Mar 2010 19:18:15 +0000

I, for one, feel that the dialog is broken. While there is an artistic element to the brevity, I think the first bubble should at least have a noun. Perhaps something like “You’re alone”, or “You’re alone now.” It’s the only time I ever felt like words were missing from your dialog and the effect was abrasive, jarring, and out of character for Mr. Bones.

By: San Antonio Employment Lawyers

San Antonio Employment Lawyers — Wed, 03 Mar 2010 18:40:27 +0000

Nicely done, really enjoy the right panels.

By: Freya

Freya — Wed, 03 Mar 2010 17:31:21 +0000

Less verbose works for me! Hmmmm… maybe the box is empty cuz she already has her chapeau…

By: Nicole

Nicole — Wed, 03 Mar 2010 17:12:08 +0000

Is it possible that the chapeau will protect her mind from Mr. Bones’s influence? Oh, where’s Morvo with that hat??