Hrm, your comment cocerns me as I had two different sets of dialogue set up for this page and I decided to go with the less verbose of the two. I may have to re-evaluate… I’ll see how the rest of the confabulations unravel.
I thought the speech was perfectly clear, Ramon, especially as I expect it to expand over the next several pages. This is not, in my view a stand-alone page.
He’s lying (again). I’m finding it a bit difficult to interpret the croggle lines in the last panel. Do they represent force that Mr. Bones is generating, or a tremble as he tries to control her fist?
And of course the mystery deepens as we look at panel 3. (Hmmm. I remember another drawing that was shown as we we watching Nadia under the influence of the frooms. We have seen the meeps and the nightmares, but we never saw the object of that drawing. I wonder if that is what is coming up out of the ground?)
Love the lizards, Ramón!
Dying to see what happens next. Been following this for a while but never commented til now. Cliff-hanger meanie! You do like to torture us readers something rotten :P
Things are stirring below…… Nadia still has her imagination (her most potent weapon it would seem)…. As long as she has her mind, she will never be truely alone in this world.
Pure Awesome! I await every page with baited breath, and each update is never enough….. I NEED MOAR!
Check page 146. Mr Bones first tells Nadia she is All Alone. He is re-iterating this statement now. Trying to fill her with despair maybe? He’s being a complete tool basically. Taunting and teasing her.
OK, that makes sense. ^ ^ I was trying to interpret it as an answer to her question, and it wasn’t really working. I was thinking it might continue on to something more explanatory in the next panels, but your interpretation works much better.
The last panel looks to me like he’s trying to crush her hand. Y’know like when you shake hands with some tough guy douche and he has to squeeze way to hard just to show you what a big man he is. And the dialogue is super, don’t change a thing.
He’s continuing what he said in 153 where he tells her that she killed her friends. Her alone. It’s her fault everything is lost. I had to scan back and read it as a continuous story, and it works perfectly.
Love the crack. Is her nightmare cracking at the seams?
Ramon – keep the dialogue as is – less is more . The BS Master is trying to upset our lady – but I don’t think it is working on her . Her rage has reached that pure white flame that burns all else away from what she feels that she has to do .
Why not? She’s essentially in a fight with the man. In real fights you don’t always keep a connecting conversation with your opponent. You taunt them, wanting to upset them. She asked why, but he’s not answering her question he’s trying to rile her up to get more angry nightmares and stuff from her. He is essentially getting more minions from her, and he wants to keep feeding her fear and anger. Or at least her fear, he may not want the anger, but he’s definitely getting it.
i think mr. bones is using nadia to create the nightmares – the first ones were randomly generated, but now he’s channeling her power of imagination and creation. it seems to me like he’s planting thoughts in her head and they’re coming into being. at least, that’s my take. i really like it when you have to think about lines and image like this.
I love how this is playing out, there not really gone but it’s what Nadia believes that makes it a reality. Can’t wait for the next page…where is that darn hat at?
Actually, I think all the dreams we have yet seen are Nadia’s past dreams – I think this because of what we’ve seen from flashbacks – Nadia’s drawings of the nightmares and the meep, for example. It’ll be interesting to see her start warping the world in realtime!
I would think Mr. Bones’ dialogue ties into a deeper root to her creation of the ‘Otherside’ we have come to know as Kukuburi. Nadia has been, for quite some time, Alone. She lost everything at one point due to a car crash, and has been shaping this world through that.
I think of Mr. Bones as Nadia’s ‘reality’, and the rest of the inhabitants as her flights of fancy and whimsy, the creations of a child, which makes this story all the more poignant in that you have a symbolic adversarial relationship between the responsibilities and burdens of reality and the magic and imagination of the childish and fantastic. Or the things she has created, as opposed to what created her, in a sense.
I, for one, feel that the dialog is broken. While there is an artistic element to the brevity, I think the first bubble should at least have a noun. Perhaps something like “You’re alone”, or “You’re alone now.” It’s the only time I ever felt like words were missing from your dialog and the effect was abrasive, jarring, and out of character for Mr. Bones.
fantastic expression on her face.
Totally. I caught myself mimicking it while reading just now. xD
I don’t completely get the dialogue, but the panel layout is awesome.
Hrm, your comment cocerns me as I had two different sets of dialogue set up for this page and I decided to go with the less verbose of the two. I may have to re-evaluate… I’ll see how the rest of the confabulations unravel.
I thought the speech was perfectly clear, Ramon, especially as I expect it to expand over the next several pages. This is not, in my view a stand-alone page.
For what it’s worth, I find the dialog to be just fine as is and unambiguous.
i did a slight adjustment for flow purposes.
He’s lying (again). I’m finding it a bit difficult to interpret the croggle lines in the last panel. Do they represent force that Mr. Bones is generating, or a tremble as he tries to control her fist?
And of course the mystery deepens as we look at panel 3. (Hmmm. I remember another drawing that was shown as we we watching Nadia under the influence of the frooms. We have seen the meeps and the nightmares, but we never saw the object of that drawing. I wonder if that is what is coming up out of the ground?)
Love the lizards, Ramón!
Dying to see what happens next. Been following this for a while but never commented til now. Cliff-hanger meanie! You do like to torture us readers something rotten :P
Things are stirring below…… Nadia still has her imagination (her most potent weapon it would seem)…. As long as she has her mind, she will never be truely alone in this world.
Pure Awesome! I await every page with baited breath, and each update is never enough….. I NEED MOAR!
Check page 146. Mr Bones first tells Nadia she is All Alone. He is re-iterating this statement now. Trying to fill her with despair maybe? He’s being a complete tool basically. Taunting and teasing her.
it still cracks me up that Mr Bones wears sunglasses, even though he doesn’t have any eyes. :)
I get the dialog. He’s basically reiterating the obvious: “Alone. Everything lost.” He’s taunting her, not answering her question.
And something’s happening….:eek:
Love the panels on this one, Ramon.
OK, that makes sense. ^ ^ I was trying to interpret it as an answer to her question, and it wasn’t really working. I was thinking it might continue on to something more explanatory in the next panels, but your interpretation works much better.
At least that’s how I read it. :) He’s a nasty boy.
The last panel looks to me like he’s trying to crush her hand. Y’know like when you shake hands with some tough guy douche and he has to squeeze way to hard just to show you what a big man he is. And the dialogue is super, don’t change a thing.
He’s continuing what he said in 153 where he tells her that she killed her friends. Her alone. It’s her fault everything is lost. I had to scan back and read it as a continuous story, and it works perfectly.
Love the crack. Is her nightmare cracking at the seams?
Ohhhhhhh he’s in trouble now…
Ramon – keep the dialogue as is – less is more . The BS Master is trying to upset our lady – but I don’t think it is working on her . Her rage has reached that pure white flame that burns all else away from what she feels that she has to do .
Definitely do not understand the dialogue in context with the last couple pages.
Why not? She’s essentially in a fight with the man. In real fights you don’t always keep a connecting conversation with your opponent. You taunt them, wanting to upset them. She asked why, but he’s not answering her question he’s trying to rile her up to get more angry nightmares and stuff from her. He is essentially getting more minions from her, and he wants to keep feeding her fear and anger. Or at least her fear, he may not want the anger, but he’s definitely getting it.
i think mr. bones is using nadia to create the nightmares – the first ones were randomly generated, but now he’s channeling her power of imagination and creation. it seems to me like he’s planting thoughts in her head and they’re coming into being. at least, that’s my take. i really like it when you have to think about lines and image like this.
‘Everthing’? Is that a typo?
looks like it — and all the rest of us missed it, too.
thanks!
“Everthing” would be a great name for a Led Zepplin tribute band.
I love how this is playing out, there not really gone but it’s what Nadia believes that makes it a reality. Can’t wait for the next page…where is that darn hat at?
Good. Use your aggressive feelings. Let the hate flow.
You want this, don’t you? The hate is swelling in you now.
I am unarmed. Strike me down. Give in to your anger.
Actually, I think all the dreams we have yet seen are Nadia’s past dreams – I think this because of what we’ve seen from flashbacks – Nadia’s drawings of the nightmares and the meep, for example. It’ll be interesting to see her start warping the world in realtime!
I would think Mr. Bones’ dialogue ties into a deeper root to her creation of the ‘Otherside’ we have come to know as Kukuburi. Nadia has been, for quite some time, Alone. She lost everything at one point due to a car crash, and has been shaping this world through that.
I think of Mr. Bones as Nadia’s ‘reality’, and the rest of the inhabitants as her flights of fancy and whimsy, the creations of a child, which makes this story all the more poignant in that you have a symbolic adversarial relationship between the responsibilities and burdens of reality and the magic and imagination of the childish and fantastic. Or the things she has created, as opposed to what created her, in a sense.
i like the way you think ;)
I like the fact you use the colour yellow for showing Nadia’s rage.
just sayin.
Is it possible that the chapeau will protect her mind from Mr. Bones’s influence? Oh, where’s Morvo with that hat??
Less verbose works for me! Hmmmm… maybe the box is empty cuz she already has her chapeau…
Nicely done, really enjoy the right panels.
I, for one, feel that the dialog is broken. While there is an artistic element to the brevity, I think the first bubble should at least have a noun. Perhaps something like “You’re alone”, or “You’re alone now.” It’s the only time I ever felt like words were missing from your dialog and the effect was abrasive, jarring, and out of character for Mr. Bones.
Is it bad that Spamalot was all I could think of when “alone” popped up? Fantastic story, characters, art, et al.
This is story is what got me writing again. Thank you so much.
You know, as much as I liked the dialog initially, this works really well, too. I really like “Poor Nadia.” Good job, Ramon! You’ve got the touch. :)
I think the addition really works, both clears up everything and adds a little more sting.