Comments on: eighty|two

By: Odo

Odo — Wed, 21 May 2008 04:49:23 +0000

Last minute speculation… The bluebird will metamorphose into a surrealistic glimpse of Her, picking up and cradling the baby Nadia, followed by her awakening to Boulder Boy carrying her away from the frooms.

It’s a possibility.

By: Faye

Faye — Tue, 20 May 2008 15:55:04 +0000

If I had a nickel for every family road trip that ended like that…

By: CyCo

CyCo — Sun, 18 May 2008 05:05:12 +0000

Talk about fractured reality… And those rock/claw-like fingers, are they going to snatch her away to safty, or crush her?!!!

By: Vear

Vear — Fri, 16 May 2008 19:35:08 +0000

I have looked at these last four pages over and over again throughout the last few weeks… the art is so perfect on these! Ramon you kick ass, sir!

By: CoyoteLovely

CoyoteLovely — Fri, 16 May 2008 15:20:44 +0000

Random other aside – I liked the idea of Nadia getting the braclet from her mom. I wear a bit of my mom’s jewelry. :D

By: CoyoteLovely

CoyoteLovely — Fri, 16 May 2008 15:18:50 +0000

A stronger story? Perish the thought, Ramon, it’s beautiful. I was just curious if I’d caught some sort of amazingly small insight – or if your thoughts of Nadia’s parents had changed somewhere along the way.

Thanks, as always! And good to hear your response!

By: Energie o2

Energie o2 — Fri, 16 May 2008 13:53:15 +0000

So. Awesome. Great job, Ramon!

By: Ramón

Ramón — Thu, 15 May 2008 18:34:07 +0000

this is where i pipe up and post my shortcomings :)

nadia’s bracelet is an error on my part. i forgot to draw it after the initial panel it appeared in. something i shall correct when i get a moments time. though it did spur an idea, so things might change a little more in the art. we’ll see.

as for the stockings and skirt. this is where you get a bit of insight into my internal editing. i originally wanted this sequence to be a bit more abstract. the original transition was going to be from the end of page page 78 (where we see her parents legs) to the second panel on page 81 (where her parents are turning into skeletons, from there it was going to transition into a sort of abstract car crash. more of a jumble of imagery.

so the slack stockings where meant to imply that there was nothing but a skeleton underneath and the grey just a foreshadowing colour.

however i thought this might be too intelligible. plus i wanted to show how good can twist unexpectedly into something else.

so i will go into the skirt and stockings panel and rectify them when i have a chance. either on the web here, or when i do a final edit of chapter one before going hopefully to print.

as much as i put my all into the online story of kukuburi, i am still treating it as a beta version. it has flaws and mistakes that i hope to iron out into a stronger story when collected.

By: CoyoteLovely

CoyoteLovely — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:27:02 +0000

I dunno – I’ve worn a lot of pantyhose, and they tear – but they don’t slouch like that… unless you’re wearing the ones without the elastic tops, and your garter belt is sagging, but honestly, that has to be a heck of a slouch, and most women would stop to correct it (we’re vain beasts after all) And you notice the garter belt issue and FAST when it does start to happen, because it tends to feel odd and uncomfortable.

I’ll dig on continuity error though. It’s just that she’s not wearing pantyhose in the other panels (though it does look like she changed her outfit).

By: Odo

Odo — Thu, 15 May 2008 17:21:43 +0000

I think that is more likely to be a small continuity error on Ramon’s part. I.e., he made Mom’s skirt just a bit too long in the first panel. It is pretty obviously the same skirt. I would also note that pretty much anyone’s stockings are going to look a bit poor in close-up.

I also think that he was using that grey panel as a cliff-hanger (the fiend). :)